Rona and the Moon

 WALT re-tell the story about Rona and the Moon in our own words.

First Draft - Mahuika Show

21/05/21/28/05/21

We are writing about our experience at the Mahuika Show. 

Once upon a time there were two girls cold sissy and kahu sissy was raning down and up the hall way and then kahu cot sissy thir come a  Masders guy runing down the holy way. sissy and kuhu was wandring wot is thet nowes I don't no and the  guy was Potiki. sissy asked Potiki to show me the way to Mahuika  and then pukeko come to capture Potiki and took hem to Mahuika. sissy and kahu sane a song togther and Mahuika saved their nana. Then the fire was out and they went home and waited for thier nana to turn back to normal and I think it was inckridabl and amazing.

Next steps

• Re read each sentence - does it make sense?
• Full stops and capital letters
• Correct your 'fast' words.

My Mum

WALT to write a description of our mum using precise words to create an image in our readers minds.

My mum is the best mum ever and I am going to tell you about her. Her name is Amy. She likes our dog Ruma. She has brown shiny eyes like me and freckles. She likes wearing sunglasses.

She never goes for runs. We like to go to Fiji  together. She is the best  mum ever because she is lovely and happy. We like to watch shaland street  together and she is beautiful every day. I love my mum as much as she loves me. I am trying to say my mum is the best mum ever!!!