Asttle Writing-Narrative writing

Teacher Note - ‘UNASSISTED’ ASTTLE WRITING

The children write for a total of 40 minutes. Within that timeframe they have to plan their writing (a brainstorm) write, edit and re-craft their work. They are not allowed to use dictionaries or word cards. The students completed their writing on paper but have typed it out for their blogs.

WALT write a creative narrative story!

Once upon a time Harry Potter woke up in Hogwarts. Harry Potter saw things disappearing. Harry heard whispering but he did not see who was whispering. He went back to sleep ... zzzz. Then BANG! He got hit. He woke up. He said, "I know what todo". He started seeig people disappearing. He said, "I have no idea what to do now." He did not know it was a witch that was whispering to make people disappear. When Harry found out, he made a spell to make the witch disappear and the witch was never seen again.

Thank-you Whaea Seroya

 

My Persuasive Writing Plan

 WALT plan our persuasive writing on a JAM board.

My Lockdown Bubble

 WALT share details about our ‘Lockdown Bubble’.

First Draft - Mahuika Show

21/05/21/28/05/21

We are writing about our experience at the Mahuika Show. 

Once upon a time there were two girls cold sissy and kahu sissy was raning down and up the hall way and then kahu cot sissy thir come a  Masders guy runing down the holy way. sissy and kuhu was wandring wot is thet nowes I don't no and the  guy was Potiki. sissy asked Potiki to show me the way to Mahuika  and then pukeko come to capture Potiki and took hem to Mahuika. sissy and kahu sane a song togther and Mahuika saved their nana. Then the fire was out and they went home and waited for thier nana to turn back to normal and I think it was inckridabl and amazing.

Next steps

• Re read each sentence - does it make sense?
• Full stops and capital letters
• Correct your 'fast' words.

My Mum

WALT to write a description of our mum using precise words to create an image in our readers minds.

My mum is the best mum ever and I am going to tell you about her. Her name is Amy. She likes our dog Ruma. She has brown shiny eyes like me and freckles. She likes wearing sunglasses.

She never goes for runs. We like to go to Fiji  together. She is the best  mum ever because she is lovely and happy. We like to watch shaland street  together and she is beautiful every day. I love my mum as much as she loves me. I am trying to say my mum is the best mum ever!!! 

Writing ANZAC Day

We have ANZAC Day to remember the soldiers that died in the war we wear poppies and not roses because poppies were the first to grow back at the war. We go to the dawn parades to always remember them. I will remember them and to remember my Great Great Grandfather every ANZAC Day .I will always wear my Great Great Grandfather medals. 

Lest we Forget.

The Great Reading Adventure

We are learning to write a moment in time about our class assembly, 'The Great Reading Adventure'.

Second Draft

The day had finally come I was nervous I felt Proud Duffy and scruffy were The main characters. Butterflies went crazy in my stomach there were so much People watching There were 4 friends and I was number 4. The friends were Alaris, Tame, Levi and me. I can see all The People were walking in Through The Door We were singing And dancing Too. we all were standing up when The music stopped we all sat down.I said my favourite Books are about plants I love monsteras And This Book Tells me how To look after Them Then it was The BFG group. Donna was Sophie and Ryan was the BFG with all the another giants.

Tsunami Evacuation

1. We wrote a recount about our evacuation experience.

Teacher Edit

On Friday we went up a hill because we got a Tsunami warning. I got picked up but when we were walking up the hill I felt scared but then I felt safe. I went to the airport. There was a lot of kids. I saw my aunty and we heard another warning. I thought, "what is going to happen next?" I wondered how long the walk was. There was nothing to do!

First Draft

On Friday we went up a hill because we got a Tsunami  warning I got pekit up bet wen were walking up the hill I falt scared bet then I falt safe   I went to the airport their was a Loet of kids  I sowr my anet and we heard a another warning I ThInkd wot is going to hapun next.I waned how Long was The walk The walk was 20 minutes TheIr was nafing To bo  

 

Unicorn Diary

WALT add details to our writing and edit carefully.

I have a unicorn diary a pretty pen I have a diemonds on the kaes it is colourful and I have a  unicorn notepad it is so cool there is a sparkle unicorn on the kaes when I write it is sparkle.

 

All About Me Poem

Learning Intention - I am learning to add details to my writing.